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the bitch

luvs

'lil yinzer~
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could pretend that you don't weep
when inside you know so well
how when u keep these sorrows in
a quell is a mere quell.
things you would not choose to keep within-
they're tearing at your soul.
cannot look Him in the eyes, &
says there was no toll.

yet you'll lift your chin & look away
tho you know your chest is aching
paste on a paste-on grin
& try & quell that inner-shaking.

try & try; supress it all
lift your chin & hide the pain
when really 'at isn't you at all.
if u ignore & you disain.
say you've lived a life of nothing
& you've tried to play 'pretend'
we know that u've supressed so much-
that hidden fear.......
that means nothing in the end

you try & put it in a box named,
'all my hidden pain.'
put that as a lullyabye in ur mind.
that place we call, disdain.'
someone may well find those fears.
may use them for thier gain.

if you have a fear,
tucked away inside
sadly, in this day & time
u can merely say u tried.

you gave your mind,
a heart, a brain.......
u gave the ur to Him.
your soul.
eventually we say good-bye.
yet learn so from the toll.

-written by a.b./aka luvs

from my heart/mind/soul/thoughts
 

luvs

'lil yinzer~
GOLD Site Supporter
& i know that needs to be written again, smoothly. that poured forth, w/ minimal self-critique.
 

luvs

'lil yinzer~
GOLD Site Supporter
my Dad says it's not perfect & to make changes. says the sync is imperfect. well, i knew that. jagov.
that is the very last time he hears my thoughts on paper spoken aloud--
 

Doc

Bottoms Up
Staff member
GOLD Site Supporter
Interesting. I know how hard it is to share you innermost feelings / thoughts etc. Especially in prose. Nicely done. :clap: :clap: :clap:

I have to mention one thing that just does not fit. I know you never asked for our thoughts on what you wrote but I can't help but comment. The title does not fit the prose at all. If anything it is the exact opposite and now I'm thinking maybe that was on purpose and it just woshhhed right over my head.
 

luvs

'lil yinzer~
GOLD Site Supporter
thanx, doc.
the title is on purpose. nothing whoosed on over u,.....
 
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